I really struggled to draw this correctly so I can get that it might come off the wrong way.
So, what's really supposed to have happened is that he simply shoved her away from his ear.
I was thinking that he might got a little annoyed of Jessi because she made really quick assumptions and was getting a little obtrusive since she's getting so close to him, uninvited. So that's why he might be getting a little louder.
However the "That's not what's going to happen!"-line also wasn't meant to be seen as him shouting, just him getting a little bit louder so Jessi would stop getting in his personal space and making assumptions. He's supposed to still being calm overall though.
Maybe it would clarify some things if I tell you that, at first, I actually wanted to write "That's not what I said is going to happen either, now is it?" but due to lack of space I needed to shorten it a little. Maybe it was a bad idea?
Anyway, I always knew that my panel sucked and now I even know that it doesn't quite get my intentions across too. But hey, better luck next time, I guess?
Just one small request for the future: If you have something to critique about my drawings, please would you be so kind and do it in the comments of the actual panel?
I get that you might not want to come off as rude or something, but this is really the best way for me to see that I've done something wrong and how I could improve next time (as I've already explained in this other panels comment-section). I certainly won't think that you're being mean (except when it's just a very hateful comment, of course) and I will definitely even be thankful that you criticised my panel!
Please, if anything seems wrong to you, feel free to talk to me! This way I know for sure that someone might not agree with what I draw or do. Believe me, I am a strong person and I can take criticism without letting it bring me down.
...Actually, this is something that has bothered me about this site for a little while now. I would really appreciate it, if more people decided to start giving out critiques. And I don't mean only directed towards me. I think we, as a community, should start criticising panels way more often and everyone should learn how to take it the right way. Even if it might lead to feeling like you're being rude.
You see, if that really would happen, we could all start to get more and more serious about what we do - and thus also more professional - and teach ourselves, for example, how to get the desired reactions inside your audience, how storytelling in general works, how to draw certain difficult things ect. In short: How to make great comics (or anything else that you might create, really)!
Also regarding me saying that my panel sucks: It's not your remark that made me say this, it's because I, myself, really didn't like it. I spent way too much time on it and it still doesn't look that good...
For me, WeDrawComics is not so much "a fun little toy" but rather a tool to develop worlds and stories with people, who might think similar as me.
In my opinion the fun in WDC doesn't come from drawing the individual Panel itself, but from creating a comic, that, in the end, you can be proud of.
Or in other words: I think, the feeling of accomplishment is way stronger than the fun I could possibly get from just doodling around.
So I might even go as far as saying that drawing the panels doesn't have to be fun at all. It could even feel like hard work, but when you're looking back at what you've done and see how great it got in the end, I'd be the first to say that, regardless of every hour you've put into your project and every mistake you might've done: It was all worth it.
You see, I have this great passion when it comes to creating something. Be it a story, a rendering (3D animation, that is) or just a comic on this silly little site: The work I put into projects could be as tedious as can be but I'd still enjoy doing it. That's because I know that, when it's done, I can look back, think of all the obstacles I had to face to get there and feel this great feeling of accomplishment before I go on to the next project, which I will work on just as hard as on any previous one.
This is the reason why I'd really like get more critiques: The more you learn how to make things right, the better your work becomes and the greater the feeling of accomplishment gets.
Apparently most of you don't think the same way about it, which I think is a little bit disappointing, but I can get over it and try to not be so persuasive about it anymore...
Also about the "jam"-aspect of this site, I don't see it any different than the definition that is written on the frontpage:
jam comic ['jam kom-ik]
1. a comic book or strip created
through the collaboration of multiple people.
You might notice that this definition doesn't make a statement on how serious the comics should be taken, but only states that they were made by different people!
PS: Raylenna, the way how you said you want "to go into another round" almost gives me the impression, you like discussing these things with me ;)
I suppose that in a way I like having these discussions with you, but it's more like I was just trying to lighten up the situation. I get worked up easily, so I wanted to say something that would hopefully not lead to you saying something that would annoy me...hehe.
on a line all by itself for that space to be there?
Hopefully it works this time around. If not, then I'll just wait for a reply before making a fool of myself again. ;)
Did it work?
*Trying the break- thing, wonder if it will work.... anyway I really like this panel too! I am digging all this dark mood lighting everyone's got going on.